I pretty spent the day meeting my executive board.. Here's our group poem..
Random
By: EB of Writers’ Guild
Love-eternal is ..
What makes one happy
Beneath the consciousness of
A person’s past
Lies the fervor
Of my life
Forever standing on
A floating pedestal
Across the unknown world
So what makes me!
Critique us? Hehehe
Adik na adik na talaga ako sa pinoy big brother.. suntukin niyo na ako..
Webbie
Apparently, I became an athlete. This blog is about what is in my mind when I am running, swimming and working out.
edit ko lang ng konti. hehe
ReplyDeleteLove: eternal
is what makes one happy
beneath the consciousness
of a person’s past.
It lies the fervor
of my life
forever standing on
a floating pedestal
across the unknown world.
So what makes me!
hehe, nakulangan ako sa poem. pwede niyo pang habaan kasi do ko gets yung last line. :) maganda yng choice of words pero you can work around it to complete the picture of your central theme. inayos ko yung line cutting, kasi kelangan strong yung words sa dulo ng line para maging effective. :)
yun lang. :D
ramdom words lang naman.. sige ba.. i'll work on it..
ReplyDeleteBwahaha!!! ADIK!!! *suntok*
ReplyDeletesabi mo kasi suntukin ka e XD